Last Challenge: Future, Sonnet, Chiasmu

A sonnet is 14 lines of verse, usually grouped into four stanzas of 4-4-3-3 lines. Sonnets used to be written in metered verse, but many modern poets forget about the meter, or at least don’t use it consistently. Sonnets also tended to be written using any number of established rhyming schemes but that, too, is no longer a formal requirement.

A chiasmus is a reversal: Laid back, with my mind on my money and my money on my mind (from Snoop Dog).

 My Body and I Face Our Future

My body, my blight, cataracts darken my sight
My body, my shame, with bunions I’m lame
My body, my bane, another sprung vein
My body, my pest, gravity lowers my chest

My body, my plight, and now cellulite
My body, my trap, a tree with no sap
My body, my curse, it’s going to get worse
My body, my shell, we’re going to hell

but my body, my all, we’ve answered the call
My body, my light, the end’s within sight
My body, my guide, I’m terrified

But my body, my source, I’ll stay the course
My friend, my body, we’ll dance to the end
Oh, body, dear, I beg of thee…..forgive me

 

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43 thoughts on “Last Challenge: Future, Sonnet, Chiasmu

    • Thanks, Troy. I feel like I have my life back now, but I learned about poetry; and I think I’ll keep on writing it because I think doing so will strengthen my prose. I’m not sure I’ll burden my blog friends with my efforts though. We’ll see. Thanks for reading them.

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  1. Janet,
    I have followed with fascination your venture into poetry. I have enjoyed your journey. You are a remarkable person. You have inspired me often during our acquaintance. Thank you. K

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    • Oh, Kay, I am always so happy to hear from you. Thanks for reading my poems and for your kind words. Do you think there is someway we could spend an afternoon or a dinner together sometime? I would so enjoy chatting the way we used to.

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  2. SNOOP DOG???? 🙂 Your poem made me think of this.

    SONNET 77, Shakespeare

    Thy glass will show thee how thy beauties wear,
    Thy dial how thy precious minutes waste;
    The vacant leaves thy mind’s imprint will bear,
    And of this book this learning mayst thou taste.
    The wrinkles which thy glass will truly show
    Of mouthed graves will give thee memory;
    Thou by thy dial’s shady stealth mayst know
    Time’s thievish progress to eternity.
    Look, what thy memory can not contain
    Commit to these waste blanks, and thou shalt find
    Those children nursed, deliver’d from thy brain,
    To take a new acquaintance of thy mind.
    These offices, so oft as thou wilt look,
    Shall profit thee and much enrich thy book.

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      • I think there’s something about earning a living writing for the public that creates a discipline and facility with words and then, too, no matter how many guys he actually was, he was brilliant. I think Elizabethan England must have been pretty entertaining.

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      • That must be true, Martha. I think Charles Dickens learned the same lessons. And, I’ve always found Elizabethan England interesting, so agree it must have been entertaining.

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  3. “At souls departure, she simply left her bag of meat and bones upon the sand”…read that somewhere years ago,rather hope to depart my body this way when the batteries no longer re-charge. Until then we will humor each other, great writing Janet, I have a tie I have been saving for The Pulitzer Prize, you may borrow it, to go first.

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    • Great quote.Absolutely great. I’ve already recorded it in my favorite quotes file. Yes, Sheila, you and I will humor one another, then I’ll wear your tie when I accept my Pulitzer Prize and I’ll lend you the chartreuse gloves I’ve been saving for the occasion when you win yours. What a plan!

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  4. Great poem, Janet. But… your mind—it is still most excellent!

    I enjoyed following along with you on this journey into poetry. I learned new terminology, and found your poems to be both creative and inspiring. I think a published book of poems could be in your future!

    Several months ago you had mentioned that you’d like to try your hand at fiction. Are you still thinking about it? Any leads on a good online fiction-writing course?

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  5. Thank you, Rita. I’m glad you enjoyed my grand adventure. I wanted to try the challenge mostly because I think writing poetry makes my prose better; but I found out I enjoyed it as well. Yes, I’m still interested in fiction, but between my columns and blogging, I don’t seem to have the time for it. I need to solve that dilemma some way. I have no leads on the sort of course you mentioned. If you find one, would you let me know? That might be the motivation I need.

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    • I’m happy you found my poetry. I’ve never written any and decided it was time to do something I wasn’t sure how to do, so joined the challenge. I actually enjoyed it. Do you ever try poetry?

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      • I find it easy to rhyme, but prefer to write poems that don’t rhyme, because I think sometimes the rhyming becomes more important than the thought in the poem. Maybe you should try a prose poem like the one I wrote for Challenge 7 or the ode I wrote for challenge 6. Both are posted. Just reading the way you write, I think either format might work well for you, because you won’t have to worry about rhyming.

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  6. Hi again! I was just letting you know that I have been given homework where I have to write a poem as if I was a world war 1 soldier so now I can have a really good go at doing some poetry! 🙂

    From Anna 😊

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  7. Good for you, Anna. Please post your poem or send it to the email address on my contact me page so I can read and respond to it. Sounds like a hard assignment to me. I’ll be interested to see what you do with it. And remember, it doesn’t have to rhyme. (Unless your teacher thinks it does!)

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